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Some people think that the government should make university education free for all students, regardless of their financial situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, public debate has been going on over whether the
government
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 should make tertiary
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 free for
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students
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. I tend to believe that higher
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 should be free– for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea of free
university
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education
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. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that many
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 cannot afford
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 they truly want to get degrees. Obviously, without enough financial resources, these
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 have to give up their dreams, which is unfair to them.
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, the
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 is already wasting taxpayers’ money on projects
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 as space exploration by making spaceships– the fund should be spent on
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education
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.
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 to say, the
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 would be well-advised to
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allocate
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 resources in a more sensible way.
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 reason for my belief is that high tuition fees may prevent some
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 from studying at
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. It is widely recognised that many young people are reluctant to face their loans after graduation, which means
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 a burden might make
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education
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 less attractive. I admit that
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’ financial contributions to higher
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helps
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 universities to improve facilities. Despite that, a more reasonable
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 funds
alocation
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a location
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 issue, for which we can find plenty of evidence from our own experience. In conclusion, I would argue that tertiary
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 should be paid
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 the
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, it would be generally advisable for the
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 to
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allocate
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 financial resources in a more beneficial way.
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