7.Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?
Globally for a long time
already
tobacco Rephrase
apply
is
Verb problem
has
mainly
consumed freely by many Rephrase
already
people
. Since it is a type of drug some people
believe that it should be illegal for usage in comparison to other drugs. In my assumption, as all drugs seriously threaten health as well as
harm the environment cigarettes not exceptionally must be prohibited.
To begin
with, lung cancer is the fairly main outcome of smoking, and many people
annually die as a result
of this
issue. In other words
, when hazardous elements in a cigarette like nicotine and carbon monoxide are inhaled, they go to the lungs and brain then
later transferred to the blood. Correct word choice
and then
As a consequence
, chemicals start damaging the inner activity of the brain and worsen the quality of blood, which is a serious problem to consider. In addition
, not only a smoker suffers
from smoking but Correct subject-verb agreement
suffer
also
surrounding people
get hurt from the elements produced. For example
, studies carried out by a group of scientists at Oxford University concluded that smoking a cigarette reduces life expectancy average to 5-7 years, and each year approximately 2.3 million people
worldwide are dying as a result
of the crop.
There are many drug types available to the community, so prohibiting all of them is a bit impossible. Thus
, the majority hope at least for tobacco to be banned for use freely. It is reasonable since by prohibition of cigarettes government slightly reduces the pressure on medical care. Indeed, medical services cost vast amounts and not all citizens can afford the treatments, so in many ,cases authority has to cover the payments and this
is a big drawback for the budget. If the tendency of banning smoking works properly the saved money may be used for other spheres, and in this
,way the air pollution would be reduced.
To conclude
, due to
the given explanations in terms of hazards to the health and environment, I am strong
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strongly
of
the idea Change preposition
against
to ban
tobacco.Change preposition
of banning
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