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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#trend #reports #media #focus #emergencies #development #people #individuals #society
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There are widely differing views on the issue of the matter many
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journals
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. I totally agree with the notion of
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private
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they use it for their profit. Not only,
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 dramatically to the mental health of the influencers. The truth that
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, it is a knife to kill them
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 of famous
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criticism
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 of Wales, Dianna Spencer who died in
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 century, princess Dianna was a
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 of many reporters and photographers,
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 to her death in 1996. Yet, perhaps the strongest
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 in favour of my optimism about
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issue
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 is that because of the crowd interest, and profit, a
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 just care for negative
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 reports and it led to the matter that more bad
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 than necessary
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 the approach of well-knowledge broadcast to the community. And it
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the decline
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decline
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inllectual
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intellectual
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social. Without,
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 with the essential reports, the public will not have enough knowledge to develop the
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 year of Vietnam, a
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 about many famous
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actors
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 and singers fraud in charity money, and a huge of residents stay at home to follow
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this scandals
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, while social distance
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 of working online they followed the stages of scandals fraud charity money.
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 to the causes of the inflation raise
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intensity
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 Vietnam in 2022. To conclude, I once again reiterate my position that the matter a
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detailed
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 about the positive progress due to the fact that it led to the decline in
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the development
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 of economics, cultures and traditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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