Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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to her death in 1996. Yet, perhaps the strongest
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social. Without,
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with the essential reports, the public will not have enough knowledge to develop the
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and singers fraud in charity money, and a huge of residents stay at home to follow
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Vietnam in 2022. To conclude, I once again reiterate my position that the matter a
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about the positive progress due to the fact that it led to the decline in
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of economics, cultures and traditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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