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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
When it comes to
educating
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education
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, some people think everybody, regardless of gender, should have the same chance to educate in every
subject
. But most
of
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the
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people think
this
 point of view isn’t realistic.
Firstly
, all over the
world
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 there are some jobs which, most
of
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the
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men
 and
women
 think, are for one gender.
For example
; a few
number of
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women
 are willing to work in the mines, and seeing a man as a
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babysitter
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baby-sitter
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babysitter
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 or kindergarten teacher is
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weird
wierd
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weird
! So, some job opportunities are more suitable for just one gender. If the universities accept the same
number
 of both genders in some subjects, there may be
men
 and
women
 who didn’t have the chance to study the
subject
 they want. The other problem is that, in most
of
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the
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countries and cultures,
men
 are the breadwinners and
women
 are the ones who manage the house. Thereby, the
number
 of
men
 who need
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a job
the job
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job
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jobs
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 and academic education is usually more than
women
. Giving
men
 and
women
 the same opportunity
in
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for
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educating
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, deprives some
men
 to have
a
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of
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job
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jobs
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 in future. In conclusion, I think giving both genders the same chance to study
in
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every
subject
 in universities is not fair. There should be a true ratio in the
number
 of
men
 and
women
 accepted in every
subject
, based on the statistics about each gender’s desires.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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