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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In many nations , more men and women are deciding to have an isolated life these days as compared to the past . From my perspective , I think
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positive development because living alone not only reduces stress but
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 for what they are doing . People who are living by themselves is harder to be stressed because their actions are not restricted by anyone as parents , home mates or roommates .
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 , living with partners can easily create conflicts because of contrasting ideas and opinions about where interiors in a house should be put .
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 , an isolated life means not accommodating anyone in our own home and it eventually results in reducing stress . The
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. Agree with the statement that living alone is not restricted to anyone or anything but they have to face all the problems that they did , including wrong actions and illegal things . And
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 , they will be the person who will come out at admitting and finding ways to fix their mistakes .
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 , in the past , they have cooperated with their parents and when they made mistakes , their parents gave them a hand to fix them. But now , they are having an isolated life , they are delegating
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 to those they did wrong things and personally say sorry to them . In conclusion , the increasing trend of people living alone is beneficial as it can raise them up , put them out of blue because they do not need to share accommodation with others and
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