Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

Nowadays,
people
prefer to have private
cars
and it has been increasing rapidly over the past thirty years,
thus
big traffic
jam
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are being created. In my opinion, it is true for some reasons. Namely, having private
cars
is more comfortable, and companies which produce
cars
encourage
people
to buy their products.
However
, the government can do some
activity
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to solve
this
concern and it will be discussed in
this
essay. Recently, for many reasons,
individuals
tend to
car
ownership and it causes traffic
jam
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jams
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.
First
and foremost, there is not sufficient public transportation and everyone who wants to use them has to wait in a long queue.
Therefore
,
people
prefer to buy a
car
, because it is more
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convenient
convinient
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convenient
. Based on a study that was done by Tehran University, the most important encouraging factor for buying
car
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is the lack of public transportation.
Last
but not least, these days companies generate
the
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variety of
cars
with a number of options and prices, so
individuals
can purchase one of them. Indeed, the government can carry out some corrective actions to decrease the
tend
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of
people
to
car
ownership.
Firstly
, they should expand public transportation.
For instance
, the number of buses should be enhanced, and the underground train system must be developed.
Secondly
, they should consider a
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specific
specefic
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specific
line on
streets
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for riding
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bicycle
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, so
individuals
use their bikes for going to work. Statistics show that
the
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many humans go to work by their automobiles
,
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because they can not utilize their
bicycle
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in crowded streets. In conclusion, despite
that
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fact many
individuals
have private
cars
, they will not use their
cars
if there are some better choices for their commutes.
As a result
, the
gornment
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government
can persuade them to
do
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not utilize their
cars
by creating new facilities for them.
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