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Cambridge IELTS 8, Test 3 Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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Although
 we usually forget,
petrol
 plays a major role in every country’s transportation system. Most of the vehicles are run by
petrol
 and there are still several problems with managing the use of
petrol
 and
increasing
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 number of personal cars. A good result of increasing the
price
 of
petrol
 is people avoid buying cars which are run by
petrol
. So, when they want to buy a car, they will choose a hybrid or electrical one.
Also
,
governments
 should invest
on
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 changing the transportation system so that public vehicles run
by
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on
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 electricity
instead
 of patrol. It would be expensive but its results lead to a less polluted environment.
On the other hand
, some economists argue that
petrol
 in most
of
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the
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countries is an economic-politic product, so increasing the
price
 of
petrol
 will
leads
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 to an increase in public transportation prices, and it will cause a
raise
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 in
price
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 of other goods. Thereby, the damages of
this
 action are more than its profits. So,
governments
 should manage some other factors before increasing the
price
 of
petrol
. In conclusion, raising the
price
 of
patrol
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petrol
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 has so many advantages but if
governments
 do not manage its results and prepare fundamentals,
this
 action will cause many problems. In my opinion,
governments
 should accept the costs of
this
 measure and invest
on
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 changing the fundamentals of the countries to increase the
price
 of
petrol
.
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