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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter * Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * Summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts * Say how you think the company should spend the money

#company #area #amount #money #sponsor #children #sports #team #two #years #concerts #feedback
Dear Mr or Madam, I am writing to express my feedback about your plan to
sponsoring
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sponsor
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 a local
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children's
chilren's
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children's
 team
on
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in
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Manhatan
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Manhattan
 city .
First
 of all, there are some local soccer teams in my area that are doing great .
In addition
, they
need
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toneed
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assist
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 to take part in national sports events. Obviously, These kinds of
local
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the local
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team
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teams
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 provide
good
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a good
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opportunity
oportunity
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opportunity
 for children to get involved in
sport
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sports
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 and avoid wasting time on
harmeful
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harmful
 activities
such
 as computer games . And your sponsoring can motivate them to practice harder and take part in some matches
that
is
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are
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 a big
successful
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 for them . Paying for concerts in our city has some
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benefits
benefites
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benefits
. namely, it can persuade people to take part in
concert
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a concert
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 and be
familar
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familiar
 with music, it had advantages for local singers that will be
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the song
a song
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song
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songs
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 on them , it can make income for
halls
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the halls
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 and shops
that
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where
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 concerts take place on them. It is
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believed
beleived
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believed
,
if
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that if
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 you help them to hire some professional coaches , they would be more successful .
In addition
, your fund should be
gradualty
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gradually
 in some times to can be
planing
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planning
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 for it . I
apreitiat
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Aprilia
 your prompt attention regarding
this
 matter . Yours, respectfully, Neda Mohammadi
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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