A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter * Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * Summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts * Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Mr or Madam, I am writing to express my feedback about your plan to

sponsoring

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a local

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children's

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children's

team

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Manhatan

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Manhattan

city .

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of all, there are some local soccer teams in my area that are doing great .

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, they

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assist

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to take part in national sports events. Obviously, These kinds of

local

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team

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provide

good

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opportunity

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opportunity

for children to get involved in

sport

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and avoid wasting time on

harmeful

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harmful

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as computer games . And your sponsoring can motivate them to practice harder and take part in some matches

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for them . Paying for concerts in our city has some

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benefits

benefites

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benefits

. namely, it can persuade people to take part in

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and be

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familiar

with music, it had advantages for local singers that will be

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the song

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song

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on them , it can make income for

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and shops

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concerts take place on them. It is

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believed

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believed

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that if

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you help them to hire some professional coaches , they would be more successful .

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, your fund should be

gradualty

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gradually

in some times to can be

planing

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for it . I

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Aprilia

your prompt attention regarding

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matter . Yours, respectfully, Neda Mohammadi

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

204 words

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The Closing

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some people think that e should invent a new language for communication. It is a benefits of this outweigh the problems associated with it?

Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion.

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that the government should provide free public libraries in every town, while others think this is a waste of money because people can get access the information on the internet. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.