Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extend do agree or disagree?

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At present, an increasing number of people are concerned about planting
trees
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plays
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an
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more and more key role than building households in
opean
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open
area of towns and cities. From my respective,
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totally agree with
this
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point. On the one hand, planting more
trees
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in open spaces
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many positive effects on
environment
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the environment
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Firstly
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,
trees
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can absorb carbon dioxide , which is exhausted from cars and factories and causes damage
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that leads to global warming . And It
also
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can provide oxygen to improve air quality.
Secondly
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,
trees
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are essential to fight
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as
it
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have
ability
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to hold soil,particularly in towns,
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,
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Shanxi
Province
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has
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has
been influenced by
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for
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several times, because
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its
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location nearby the
ChangJiang
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Changjiang
River as well as there is no
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trees
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to protect.
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, since planting lots of
trees
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, when
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the flood
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comes,
it
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can keep soil and prevent flooding.
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,
trees
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are
value
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asset
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.
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, planting
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outside,
such
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as
parks
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in parks
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,
gardens
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and gardens
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, is beneficial for citizens to keep fit and socialize. As individuals are more delight choose park for exercising, like jogging,taking a walk that needs good environment. People can get close to nature meanwhile breathing in fresh air which will attract them to participate
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outdoor activities, prevent them from having
sedentary
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lifestyle and get away from
stress
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the stress
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of work for a while.
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, along with taking part in activities , they are able to make new friends who have shared-interest which plays
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significant role in people’s lives ,particularly for
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since the majority of aged people are living alone, so it’s
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chance for them to integrate into crowed. In conclusion, there are many reasons to believe that constructing houses is important,despite that
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am in
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of plantings
trees
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are more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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