Some people are concerned that children spend too much time on computers playing games, chatting and watching videos but all this time is actually good preparation for children, who will have to spend many hours working on computers throughout their education and their working lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Hardy, who is admitted to our hospital due to worsening
asthma
symptoms. Lucas has had
asthma
since the age of 5. He is brought and cared for
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last
2005 and 2011. His brother has
also
asthma
, his father is a smoker. He lives together with his divorced mother
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and recently changed to secondary school.
Last
month, he is presented in the clinic with
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phlegm and bothered sleep. Examination reveals
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wheezes upon expiration of chest and conjunctival congestion and
also
his
peak
flow
is 280. He is
then
advised to keep track of his
peak
flow
diary for follow-up consultations and stress the importance of breathing exercises. Medication prescribed: Ventolin inhaler, budesonide 200mcg powder inhaler; two times
however
, forgets to take, salmeterol mcg; two times. Today, his
peak
flow
shows 260, he fails to record
peak
flow
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not comply with budesonide.
Consequently
, he is brought to the clinic with worsening asthmatic signs. He is
then
instructed to do a chest x-ray and complete his blood count procedure. He is required for
further
assessment for anxiety as he is at high risk for depression and anxiety as shown
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his social history.
Therefore
, a specialist should review his case for
further
management. Please ensure that Lucas follows the exercise regimen program and
peak
flow
review after exercise. If you have any questions please do not hesitate to contact me anytime.
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