The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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Yes, I completely agree with it. Nowadays, the
government
is spending a lot of money on unnecessary schemes.
Instead
of that, if they use that amount in addressing the problems of the
people
, we can see a better state. I am staying in Andhra Pradesh now. here the
government
is not concentrating on unemployment. is not concentrating. All the educated
people
are moving to other states to find
a suitable jobs
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for them. Nowadays education quality is
also
not good. If the
government
concentrate on the quality of education
then
children's
future
will be good. The
government
is promising the
people
that they will implement a number of things but when it comes to the actual picture just they are keeping those promises in records ,not in implementation.
Firstly
government
need to understand where the public is facing the problems, like roads,electricity,taxes, transportation etc. If all these things are good in one state
then
they can invest the amount in building statues or some other necessary schemes.
People
should need to choose the right person for the right position
then
only we can see a better
future
.
Government
people
are becoming very commercial. Some
people
are taking bribes from poor
people
for land registration or for  sanctioning
the
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loans etc. If they are doing their duty perfectly
then
the public is not going to face
this
kind of issue. The
government
is following some useless schemes. Everyone needs to think about our
future
and we have to raise the issue whatever we are facing to the
government
. In my point of view if the
government
is good
then
we can better state,
better
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country and
better
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a better
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future
.
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