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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Ask them for help finding accommodation - Tell them where you would like to live - Tell them the type of place you are looking for

#minutes #topic #move #city #work #people #manager #accommodation #type #place
Dear Ram, Hope
this
 letter finds you and
your
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you're
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 in radiant health. I am writing
this
 letter to inform
about
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you about
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 the
selling
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 of my personal
television
. The reason
of
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for
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 selling is that my wife got
wonderful
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a wonderful
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 opportunity to work in London so we are migrating to
new
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a new
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 place within
next
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the next
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 20 days. I am aware that you are looking for
television
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a television
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 to buy so thought to inform you about
this
. It's a LED
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Television
Televison
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Television
 of brand sony purchased
on
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in
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 August
Last
 year.
This
 magnificent machine
is build
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 upon smart technologies which
has
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have
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bluetooth
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Bluetooth
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,USB,WIFI features and
are
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is
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 very rare to get in Sony brand
uder
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under
user
this
 segment.
This
 Device hold 5 yrs warranty. The powerful sound quality of
television
 makes the cult watching experience.
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Moreover
Morever
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Moreover
,
This
 device can be used as
extended
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an extended
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 monitor with
laptop
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a laptop
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 for official work.
Although
, The radio feature is not activated yet
but
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we can start after requesting over call to
service
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the service
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center
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centre
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.
This
television
 is
special
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a special
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 edition launched on
70th
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the 70th
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 Anniversary of
brand
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the brand
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. I would like to invite
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you into
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into
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to
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 my house on 26th August to have a look
on
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at
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television
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the television
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 and we will
also
 get a chance to spend some leisure time with
variety
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 of
deliciuos
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delicious
 and
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healthy
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heathy
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healthy
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 meals.I hope you will visit soon. Best Wishes, Rahil Kumar
Submitted by info.rahil on

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