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In
contemporary
day ,a highly controversial issue Add an article
the contemporary
a contemporary
relate
whether the Change the verb form
relates
celberations
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celebrations
celebration
such
as national Linking Words
days
have become essential events that lead to Use synonyms
spend
many budgets by the communities , Change the verb form
spending
therefore
many people believe that official authorities who have the authority in any Linking Words
country
must concrete on worthy issues which bring the utility for the societies .I completely ,advocate Use synonyms
with
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apply
this
statement for many reasons.In Linking Words
this
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essay
I'm going to examine the phenomenon from both Add a comma
,essay
view point
and I will support Correct your spelling
viewpoint
Add a hyphen
real-life
real -life
relevant examples.
Correct your spelling
real-life
To begin
with, in recent Linking Words
stage
with the development of globalization nations become tend to charge a Fix the agreement mistake
stages
lot
of budgets to celebrate Use synonyms
in
the events like national Change preposition
apply
days
.The main reason for Use synonyms
bielving
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believing
that is
many crowds Linking Words
believe
that Change the verb form
believes
such
special Linking Words
days
play a crucial role to strengthen the loyalty of the citizens, so they engaged in many traditional dances which Use synonyms
is regard
important to present the Change the verb form
is regarded
country
identity .Use synonyms
For example
, many Linking Words
countries
take Use synonyms
opportunity
to identify Add an article
the opportunity
about
their civilization through Change preposition
apply
this
type of Linking Words
Use synonyms
celebrations
.Fix the agreement mistake
celebration
Moreover
, the vast majority of young assert Linking Words
on
the Change preposition
apply
significant
of Replace the word
significance
held
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holding
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this
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this celebration
these celebrations
celebrations
, because they consider Use synonyms
that is
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positive
way to bond the relationship between the citizens .Add an article
a positive
Indiviuals
can gather to do Correct your spelling
Individuals
Individual
many
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any
activity
in which all Change to a plural noun
activities
person
can share to express Fix the agreement mistake
people
about
their love toward their land. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, the holding of festivals Linking Words
in
national Change preposition
on
days
can help to widen the cultures and inherent by Use synonyms
do
a Change the verb form
doing
lot
of T.v reports which give a Use synonyms
lot
of details about the cultures of the folks as well as Use synonyms
the
show an important inherent milestone .Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, the progress Linking Words
countries
admit that the national Use synonyms
celebrations
consider a golden chance to represent all details to Use synonyms
the
others around the world
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apply
On the other hand
, many folks view that the government should hinder Linking Words
to spend
Change the verb form
spending
Correct your spelling
their
thier
money Correct your spelling
their
in
Change preposition
on
celebrations
, while there are many things else Use synonyms
need
to improve like Correct pronoun usage
that need
the
frustration which is more Correct article usage
apply
value
to achieve the best life for the communities. Replace the word
valuable
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Also
individuals with Add a comma
,Also
the
good frustration and amenities can reach Correct article usage
apply
to
Change preposition
apply
the
happiness Correct article usage
apply
,
because it Remove the comma
apply
is contribute
to Change the verb form
contributes
grow
the Change the verb form
growing
the
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apply
countries
.Use synonyms
for instance
, Japan Linking Words
country
become a good example on Use synonyms
conceration
of achieving the boost of any Correct your spelling
concertation
country
.Use synonyms
In addition
, a Linking Words
lot
of folks confess that the improvement of value things can help to create Use synonyms
good
atmosphere among the Add an article
a good
countries
.people feel that Use synonyms
pay
attention Wrong verb form
paying
on
some worthy issue can serve all humans .Change preposition
to
Agood
example many lands become more Correct your spelling
A good
boost
when they focus on the amenities which bring Replace the word
boosted
the
pleasure Correct article usage
apply
for
the nations
To conclude, it is thought that the Change preposition
to
Correct your spelling
holding
helding
Correct your spelling
holding
many
Change preposition
of many
celebration
may regard Change to a plural noun
celebrations
negative
way in which societies west their money to do Add an article
the negative
variety
of activities , so a Add an article
a variety
lot
of Use synonyms
bielvers
admit that the government must do various worthy to benefit their humans .In my opinion, I completely agree with the importance of achieving some values and worthy things which may bring warfare for the individuals .Correct your spelling
believers
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