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Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are conflicting views regarding the necessity of having
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education
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 to live a successful life. Some advocate that
one
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 needs
education
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 qualifications to be successful, whereas others believe that they do not certainly result in the person's achievements.
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 essay is going to discuss these two views and will come to a conclusion. On
one
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 hand, most occupations have become specialized, and performing them requires educated
people
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.
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, being a physician, engineer, teacher, etc. requires specialized
education
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. No
one
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 can do them without academically learning them.
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, educated
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 can think systematically and solve their problems through the problem-solving method they have learned in the university/at school. They have good knowledge of scientific theories and read books, using the experiences of others, i.e., the writer.
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, the proponents of the
second
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 view argue that
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 can succeed without being educated. They claim that many well-educated graduates cannot achieve what they are supposed to, so they fail in their careers. In fact, they declare that
one
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 needs other qualifications and skills,
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 as perseverance, desire, interest, financial resources, good communication skills, and so on.
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, if somebody wants to be a good hairdresser, she should not be obliged to go to university.
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 being able to have expertise in her job, she needs to get along with others well and have the required talent, perseverance, and financial resources. To sum up the dispute, I believe that the definition of success is different for different
people
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.
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, everybody needs some kind of
education
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 suitable for her own life and career. Not all
people
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 have to go to university; they can attend some courses which give them insight and help them find an appropriate job.

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