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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 bags is seriously increasing, opponents and I believe that using these
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 going to affect the whole world negatively. My contention will be
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 have detrimental effects on the environment because they are non-biodegradable.
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 means that it is extremely complicated to get rid of these materials, they should be burned or buried
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 the soil; these solutions have harmful drawbacks.
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, if a hungry turtle eats a transparent bag by mistake as it looks like a jellyfish, the bag going to choke the turtle and it will die.
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, what can be said is that human doings and usages have indispensable salient in putting the environment in critical status.
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 bags contain toxic chemicals that have detrimental side effects.
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 are burned, most people will inhale deleterious gases and a plethora of lethal diseases will spread
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 as Cancer. A prime example is a study conducted by the World Health Organisation that revealed that
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 air pollution is one of the main reasons for Cancer and Asthma.
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, not only do
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 bags have demerits for marine life, but
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 for all creatures. In conclusion, after
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 is a mandated solution to save the environment. I am a staunch believer that using these
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 must be outlawed due to their destructive effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • non-biodegradable
  • pollution
  • biodegradable
  • sustainable
  • mitigate
  • ecosystem
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
  • implementation
  • convenient alternatives
  • enforcement
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