IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

The given shows the money spent on books in different countries.Compare this and give your opinion.

#money #books #countries
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given bar graph demonstrates changes in expenditure on
books
Use synonyms
 in four European countries from 1995 to 2005. Overall, it is evident that Germany spent the highest amount of money on
books
Use synonyms
 during the given period, whereas all countries experienced an upward trend in the cost of
books
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, Germany and Italy have some fluctuations as well. Germany's expenditure on
books
Use synonyms
 was $80
million
Use synonyms
 in 1995.
This
Linking Words
 figure fluctuated between $80
million
Use synonyms
 and $90
million
Use synonyms
 from 1995 to 2003, before increasing to about $95
million
Use synonyms
 in 2005.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the cost of
books
Use synonyms
 in Italy was just below $50
million
Use synonyms
 in 1995 and experienced a variation between just below $ 50
million
Use synonyms
 and slightly below $60
million
Use synonyms
 within the
next
Linking Words
 four years.
Then
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 gradually went up to approximately $62
million
Use synonyms
 in 2005. The money spent on
books
Use synonyms
 by Austria began at around $ 30
million
Use synonyms
 and
this
Linking Words
 considerably rose to $ 30
million
Use synonyms
 in 1999 and remained stable for the
next
Linking Words
 two years. After that,
this
Linking Words
 figure climbed dramatically to nearly $72
million
Use synonyms
 in 2005. Interestingly, France was the only country that showed steady growth throughout the given period, which rose from about $57million to nearly $75
million
Use synonyms
 between 1995 and 2005
Submitted by sandamalipc1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: