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Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people’s life. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Arts
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 play an important role in everybody's life. Some communities believe that
government
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 should invest more in
arts
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 to develop
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's lifestyles while other communities argue with
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 matter and say that it is important to focus on other issues rather than
arts
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 to increase the quality of
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's life. In
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 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
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 I will give my opinion on
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 matter. On the one side,
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 like paintings, designing, etc are one's own talent.
Arts
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also
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 have their own importance to develop the
nation
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's values.
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, India is the greatest
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 which has different cultures in different regions. Through , art
people
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 express their feelings and emotions. Folk
arts
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 have a great demand in India. These folk
arts
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 have their own unique style and they are like wall paintings
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 and calendar paintings.
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 should support
arts
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 to develop the
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's
arts
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 which have their own significant value. On the other side, around the world other than
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 there are various
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 which have a great impact on society.
Government
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 should focus on
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's
problems
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 like transportation
problems
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, etc which is helpful to all
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.
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, Hyderabad is the capital of the Indian states of Telangana and Andhra Pradesh. It is a city with multiculturalism where there is a huge population. Here, there are huge traffic
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. So, the
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 developed subway lines like metro stations to avoid traffic. Another good example is, the Singapore
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 focused on the development of the education system. Now it is the place to provide free primary education to children. To sum up, In my ,view both
arts
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 and
problems
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 in society have their own importance. But I agree with the latter statement because the
nation
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's economic position is weak so it is better to focus on other
problems
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 related to
people
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 rather than the
arts
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.
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