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Many People Believe That Formal Pen And Paper Examinations Are Not The Best Method Of Assessing Educational Achievement

#people #pen #paper #examinations #method #achievement
While some people believe that formal ‘pen and
paper’
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 are the best examinations and
students
 don’t need to
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 way of demonstrating educational achievement, there is another
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 idea that
this
 method is significantly worse than
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 one. In my opinion, the digital age is making ‘pen and
paper’
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 seem obsolete and schools need to combine them with other forms of assessment. On the one hand,
students
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this
 examination and they need to hard make preparation, but when scholars prepare for
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 they
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 deal with stressful situations. Some
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students
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 prefer rote learning to a normal way of preparation in
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 path they implied that examinations are not conducted under strict invigilation and so
students
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students
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On the other hand
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 using
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 variants allow
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 people, but
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 case he gets a high score himself. All things considered, I believe that in the future government create another way to appraise the whole education achievement
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 and pen’ examination.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal examinations
  • pen and paper
  • educational achievement
  • assess
  • standardized measure
  • knowledge and skills
  • develop skills
  • stressful
  • pressure
  • capture
  • abilities
  • potential
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