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Borrowing Money from afriend can harm or damage the friendship

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Introduction
Borrowing
money
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 from friends may have negative effects as well as positive effects. It depends on
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attitude
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the attitute
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attitute
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attitude
 of
giver
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the giver
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 friend and receiver
one
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apply
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. In
further
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paragraphs
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,paragraphs
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i
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I
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 will discuss how
borrowing
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the borrowing
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 process affects
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the relationship
a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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 we discuss
negative
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the negative
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consequences
consquences
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consequences
 of borrowing
money
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. Suppose Ram borrows
money
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 from Sham for
period
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a period
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 of time, but he
unable
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is unable
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 to return
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money
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the money
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 on time that makes
negative
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a negative
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 impact on
the
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his
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 mind of Sham. That
incidence
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incident
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 put
negative
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a negative
the negative
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 impact on their friendship.
Eventually
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,Eventually
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 both will start
eshchewing
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eschewing
 each other. For some reason
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their
thier
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their
 friendship does not end
then
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also
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consequence
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consequences
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 are there. Ram can't ask for
money
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 for any other emergency.
Body paragraph 2
There are
also
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 positive effects of borrowing
money
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. Suppose
neelu
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need
 borrows
money
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 from
salman
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Salman
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 for the operation of his father . Because of
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this
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,this
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 their friendship bond becomes
more
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apply
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stronger than ever.
Body paragraph 3
Salman has
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kind
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a kind
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 of
satisfied
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satisfying
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 feeling.
Conclusion
In conclusion there arene

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