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Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there is a debate regarding suitable punishments for criminals belonging to the young age group. Some believe that the same type of punishment must be awarded to a person no matter whether he belongs to an old or teenage group. In my opinion, I believe that adolescent criminals ought to be dealt more care and politeness. On the one hand, it is argued that adolescents should be treated in a lenient way because
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usually they are not mature enough to understand the nature of crimes and punishments. Sometimes they show violence without a reason and perform wrong activities only under the influence of media content.
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, expectedly they would live a longer life so they must not spend precious years of life in prison. It is,
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, better for society to implement soft laws for young lawbreakers.
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, some opine that harsh sanctions must be given to every offender to spread fear in the community. It is the best way to maintain law and order in society.
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, long custodial sentences, death penalties or life-long imprisonment.
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, I am convinced that alternative ways of punishing might produce better results. These trials include volunteer work in community centres and rehabilitation programs.
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, those young people may become better society members. In conclusion,
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 some hold the view that the same methods of giving sentences to every person without considering age should be used to stop violence in a region, I am of the opinion that polite punishments to make young adults understand what they have done wrong is the best way to tackle
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