More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem.

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day ,a highly controversial issue whether relating to the phenomenon of wild
animals
extinctions ,
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some people believe that there are many reasons behind that .In
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environmental
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of numerous wild
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of climate
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some
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leave peacefully .
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the bands bear became the
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animal that was
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threatening
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factors that prevent them to stay
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some
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heating .
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overpopulation may regard the major reason to spread the live places in which
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the other hand, despite the existence of the extinction and
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it still some solutions that may
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measure to hinder the dieng of
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the governments must apply a plethora of positive roles that encourage people to maintain the wild
animals
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special guard placed to protect them from killing .
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must send awareness massage to prove the
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of wild
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A good
illustration here
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studies which conducted in different area obvious that the numerous of
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massage have decreased the numbers of animal extinctions. To conclude , in modern days the phenomenon of
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extension became more spread
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which causes a lot of significant problems that refer to many reasons which they have mentioned
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and some solutions are taken by
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to prevent the
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of problem.
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