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Band 3.5

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
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It is argued that
fossil burning
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cars
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 should be totally prohibited and replaced by
the
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electric
cars
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. I agree with
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 statement as it is an environmentally friendly option that promotes the usage of
renewalbe
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renewable
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source
sourse
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source
 of
energy
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. Petrol and
gas fuelled
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gas-fuelled
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cars
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 negatively affect
on
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the air that we
breath
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. Toxic emissions from these vehicles are bad for both people and all the living organisms
of
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 our planet. Their replacement with machines powered by electricity will significantly reduce the harm that humanity brings to nature. A great example can be
cars
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 from a company called Tesla, which is engaged in the production of automobiles with
the
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fuel in the form of electricity. What is more, the owners of those
cars
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 have
an
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 ability to charge their
cars
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 using renewable
energy
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 sources.
This
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 spreads and popularizes the use of these sources of
energy
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.
Furthermore
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, the usage of renewables can
finally
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 solve the air pollution problem as more people will use
this
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 method of
energy
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 production than the traditional one (by burning coal, petrol,
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etc.)
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, gas stations in China where drivers can charge their
cars
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 with electricity obtained from
the
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windmills. In
conclusion
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 I want to note that I support banning
cars
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 that burn fossil fuels and I believe that it will be a good decision for the
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government
goverment
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government
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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