It is easier for wealthy people to maintain good health than it is for people who don’t have large amounts of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons and include relevant examples. Write at least 250 words.

Today, many
people
are working hard and maintaining a healthy diet for
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better well-being.
However
, it is believed that the rich community can do
this
more easily than the poor. I completely agree with
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this
essay will present my reasons why.
Firstly
,
people
who earn a hefty amount of
money
can have a much healthier diet and can use sophisticated training facilities.
As a result
, they can consistently maintain their health over a longer period of time than the
people
who can't get access to
such
food and exercise.
For example
, Cristiano Ronaldo is the healthiest sportsman in terms of his body fat percentage;
this
is because he has hired the best trainer and dietician which is only possible because he has tons of
money
. If other
people
had that much
money
, they would
also
be able to maintain their health.
In addition
, wealthy
people
can
also
afford to visit doctors more often which means that they can diagnose any kind of disease quickly and follow the required treatment. They can even find cancer in its
first
stage and can cure it.
On the other hand
, poor
people
don't have much wealth to be able to go to hospitals regularly and they only use medical facilities in case of emergency.
This
means they cannot get the proper treatment if they have a slow poison disorder which will eventually lead to the worst of health conditions. In conclusion, I fully agree that the wealthier community can maintain a healthy lifestyle much easier than those who don't have
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amount of
money
because they have easier access to
healthier
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diet, luxurious
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facilities and can do health-checkup more often.
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