People in the limelight have a responsibility to set an example for others by their good behaviour. Do you agree?

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Many argue that popular figures in society should maintain a certain level of decency because they are very influential. I partially agree with

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statement as the common folk follow their idols and imitate their actions, style and behaviours.

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, the general public

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has a responsibility to choose how they want to be influenced. People are easily influenced by their favourite TV stars or sports idols. They aspire to be like them and follow their trends.

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, well-known figures have the ability to influence their fans.

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, it is imperative that these civilians behave in an appropriate manner that upholds the morals and values of society.

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, many young boys idolize Eben Etsebeth, a Springbok rugby player, even though he was recently in the news for brawling at a local pub.

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is not the kind of behaviour that young boys should be exposed to.

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, famous people

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have a right to express themselves and to be a person in their own right. It is

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the obligation of each individual to decide which qualities and values of their idols they would like to mimic.

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, they should choose which attributes to love and which negative behaviours they will ignore.

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, Will Smith,

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famous actor and one of the only black males to ever get an Oscar. He is loved by many for his looks, charm, and brilliant acting.

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, at the recent Oscar

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, he decided to hit one of his fellow actors after losing his temper.

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is not the kind of behaviour one should idolize. In conclusion,

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it is the duty of famous people to act appropriately in public and live up to good standards, each person has the responsibility to decide which famous person(s) they want to copy and which character traits they want to imitate.

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coherence cohesion

The overall structure of the essay is clear and the introduction and conclusion are present. However, clearer linkages and transitions between ideas and examples are needed to enhance coherence and cohesion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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312 words

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