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More and more people are buying fashionable clothes these days. Does it have more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answers and include examples relevant to your experience.

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As westernization trended,
clothes
 teste has moved to fashionable and costly brands. A wide range of
people
 is purchasing trended
clothes
 annually and keeping up their stiles update.
This
issue
 has brought a lot of controversies, I assume that the negative aspects far outweigh
positive
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the positive
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 ones. In
this
essay
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 I shall discuss
about
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my argument and give some
example
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examples
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. Along with increasing social media use,
young
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the young
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 generation
are
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is
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 provoked to follow the trends. Looking from the negative perspective, the effects of
this
 phenomenon consist of wasting
money
, showing their economic level, increasing competition, and covetousness, which are inevitable.
Firstly
, advertising has always been trying to induce
people
 to buy trendy
clothes
 and
enhancing
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 profiteering .
Thus
 it leads to wasting
money
, and it is one reason that would cause consumerism.
Secondly
 costly brands
is
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are
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 converted into
kind
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a kind
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 of property which showing of them would sharpen the class distinction.
As a result
 of showing, the part of poverty of society endure
this
issue
 and will have more competition sense that it can seem bad effect.
For
example
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 by
time
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the time
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that
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apply
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I went to school, the most of students had bought
the
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apply
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Nike shoes, but I cannot afford to buy
it
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them
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. After
this
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 I was isolated for a long time. With regards to positive view,
firstly
 wearing trendy
clothes
 enhance the aesthetics aspects of city and gathering because of sharp
colors
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.
Secondly
young
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the young
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 generation
have
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has
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 always been keeping themselves
update
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updated
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,
hence
this
issue
 can attract their adventure-seeking spirit. Seeing
this
 phenomenon from another angle, turning
this
issue
 into a hobby leads to boosting creativity and will bring a lot of new
idea
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in
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to
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design
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designing
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 the
clothes
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of clothes
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.
For instance
, every year more and more
clothes
designer
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designers
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 are provoked to introduce new products
and
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apply
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they
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that
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 will meet the latent needs of
people
. As
result
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 the infrastructure of
clothes
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the clothes
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 industry is intensifying, and these reasons
encompasses
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 earning more
money
, more job opportunities and creating a window of
new
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a new
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prospect
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prospects
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. To conclude, for the time being buying new design customs have been increased and
this
 begs the question, the positive side
do
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 in fact outweigh
negative
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the negative
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 ones. But the answer
of
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question
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 is no. on the one hand, there is no doubt that moving to trendy and fashionable
clothes
have
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has
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good
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a good
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 effect on society via making more
money
, respond the new
people
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people's
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 needs.
On the other hand
 profiteering and showing off
the
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apply
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expensive
clothes
 are
strong
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a strong
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reason
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reasons
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 to
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an argument
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argument
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with
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this
 phenomenon.
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