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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#popularity #street #shops
In
this
 day and age,
number
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 of individuals killed by wild creatures is mounting dramatically. If you look at
this
 issue in a negative way, you will probably become frightened of paying
visit
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a visit
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 to
habitats
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the habitats
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 of wild animals.
Conversely
, if you look at
this
 phenomenon in a positive way, one might say that these beings mostly make an effort to guard themselves as well as their cubs. Poverty levels are setting new records each year. One key reason is that more and more machines are devised to replace
population
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the population
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 with the
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simplest
simpliest
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simplest
 jobs,
such
 as
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deliverymen
deliveryman
deliveryman's
deliverymans
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deliverymen
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, waiters, cashiers and so on. There is no doubt that more important than the issue of diminishing
of
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biodiversity is the greenhouse gases
erupted
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 into the atmosphere along with the consequences of
such
 phenomenon. Despite the popular belief,
GM
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that GM
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 foods are beneficial for
future
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the future
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 of humankind,
thus
 the positive effects of producing genetically modified nutrition, like cheaper vegetables, should not be overlooked. Undoubtedly, childhood obesity is one of the most horrid issues
of
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 youngsters. If I were in a position to devise a formula to fight
this
 disease, I would
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definitely
definetely
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definitely
advert
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advertise
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sport
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sports
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 facilities
among
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for
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 youths.
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