Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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Modern technology,

such

as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many

people

to do their work from

home

at least part of the

time

instead

of going to an office

everyday

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every day

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. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of

this

situation? In the contemporary era, there

many

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are many

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kinds of technology global. Nowadays,

people

want

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towant

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save

time

in every field. There is myriad public work from their

home

online. There is numerous merit

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this

topic along with certain demerits

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such as

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"every rose comes with thorns", I will present these in the upcoming paragraph. The

first

and foremost

advantages

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advantage

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which

come

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comes

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to my mind, in

modern

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the modern

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era, who are working from their

home

and they are taking any types of benefits. Those public save their

time

. They can maintain their body.

For example

, one of my friends worked in a software company and he went to the office in the morning and

then

came back evening daily. He wasted

time

in between travelling almost 3 hours. Now, he changed his company and he is working from

home

as well as he uses their 3 hours of exercise.

However

, there is a very famous dictum "even the moon has its dark side"

likewise

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, there are

few

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a few

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disadvantages

who

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when

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people

are

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working online from their house. They are not serious in their work, not all

employee

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employees

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but most of the public.

Furthermore

, they are taking a big break in their shift and no

any

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apply

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rules

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or regulation

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regulation

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regulations

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job

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the job

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. Many

people

are wasting

time

and wasting company money.

For example

, one man is working from

home

. he wakes up from bed before 5 minutes to

his

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start job. In conclusion, it can be said that

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"every coin has two sides" in the same way

this

topic has both advantages and disadvantages.

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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Although nowadays people are reading news through internet, newspaper still remain of values. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can the arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot? Give the reason?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?