Some people believe what children watch on TV influences their behavior. Some say it is the amount of time watching television that influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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, it is becoming increasingly common that more people are likely to agree that the programs on
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their
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.
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, about whether
others
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support
for
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the amount of
time
watching is
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effect
to
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children
's
behavior
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. In my opinion, I believe it may give both
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for some reasons.
First
of all, it is an indisputable fact that the opinion about
TV
shows able to
cause
how
children
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and think in many bad ways. It is a
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explanation,
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many
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attention-grabbing
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such
as display of violence, nudity would
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to
children
's moral code if they parrot or mimic it. Particularly, whether
children
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approach
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to
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sex education in
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way or
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preteen
audience
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audiences
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not
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aware
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threaten
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of
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their mental
health
or other illness if they have sexual abuse.
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, its convenience is clearly seen that studies prove that a huge of people who rape
children
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sex education and
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watching porn movies
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in
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early age.
On the other hand
,
this
constantly causes some drawbacks
such
as the amount of
time
they watched
also
cause
to their
children
’s
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.
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, spending much
time
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screen
time
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will create a sedentary lifestyle for
children
. Whether
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teens act with reluctance to
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participate
in physical activities that will
cause
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.
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smartphone
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,
smart
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TV
following that the increasing of users led to the rate
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wearing
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eyeglasses
raise tremendously. And nowadays, the major of people
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classes than who non-classes.
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that, the amount of
time
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TV
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for
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book
also
cause
to have less awareness in young
children
. A nation,
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health
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and
knowledges
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that
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is a
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country. In conclusion, the content of
TV
programs
are
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effect
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to
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children
's mental
health
while the
time
how much they watch
is
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effect
to
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their physical
health
. Both of
it
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brings
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many negative for us if
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over-traversing. In my opinion, I opine that the things what we watch more serious due to if we don’t have a
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strength
spirit and a good
minset
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mindset
that it would make our
health
turn down dramatically.
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