Some people believe what children watch on TV influences their behavior. Some say it is the amount of time watching television that influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common that more people are likely to agree that the programs on
TV
would affect their behaviour.
This
trend has caused some controversy, about whether others support the amount of time watching is the effect on the reasoned outcome of children's behaviour. In my opinion, I believe it may give both effects for some reasons.
First
of all, it is an indisputable fact that the opinion about
TV
shows able matter how children act and think in many bad ways. It is a persuasive explanation, for ,example
much
Change the quantifier
many
show examples
attention-grabbing
contents
Fix the agreement mistake
content
show examples
such
as the display of violence, and nudity would lead to their moral code if they parrot or mimic it. Particularly, whether scion is not approached sex education in the right way or if many preteen audiences are not aware of the threat of
this
that will element their mental
health
or other illness if they have sexual abuse.
Moreover
, its convenience is clearly seen that studies prove that a huge of people who rape offspring used to reckon wrongly about sex education and the effect of watching porn movies at an early age.
On the other hand
,
this
constantly causes some drawbacks
such
as the number of hours they watched
also
cause to their children’s
health
.
In particular
, spending much space on screen time will create a sedentary lifestyle for children. Whether teens act with reluctance to participate in physical activities that will cause bad for their
health
.
For example
, since the birth of smartphones, and smart
TV
following that the increasing of users led to the rate of wearing eyeglasses raise tremendously. And nowadays, the major of people wear glasses than those who non-classes.
Besides
that, the amount of hours approach on
TV
than on books
also
purpose to have less awareness in young heir. A nation, with weakness in
health
and knowledge, is a weak country. In conclusion, the content of
TV
programs effective offspring's mental
health
while the time how much they watch outcome their physical
health
. Both of them bring many negative for us if
it
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over-traversing. In my opinion, I opine that the things that we watch are more serious due to if we don’t have a strong spirit and a good mindset that it would make our well-being turn down dramatically.
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