Recent advances in information technology have made communication between people a lot easier. However, these advances are negatively affecting human relationships as people spend less time in the company of others. Discuss the causes and suggest some solutions for this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Have you ever wondered what life would be like without a phone, laptop or other
technology
for a day? We often see
technology
as an essential part of our
lives
and think that these changes are due to
people
. But there is an opinion that "
People
are changing
technology
every day, but
technology
is
also
changing
people
's
lives
". Is
technology
increasingly dominating and orienting
behavior
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and habits not only of individuals but
also
of communities or generations
.
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The term
technology
is derived from Greek, meaning the tools, skills and tricks of
people
in life activities. Today,
technology
is seen as a system of methods, tools, and capabilities for solving problems or processes that create products (physical and intangible). Humans are increasingly developing
technology
, but at the same time dependent on it, being dominated by it. The development and transformation of
technology
is an inevitable rule
,
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when
people
actively replace an important part (basic, core) or the entire
technology
in use with another more advanced
technology
.
Technology
is present in all areas of our
lives
and brings us undeniable benefits. Our
lives
are getting better and better, saving
labor
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, etc.
However
, there are
also
negative effects when the dependence on
technology
is increasing. That leads to lazy thinking,
inactivity
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, relationships
also
become cold and dry when most choose to maintain
meeting
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meetings
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,
chatting
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and
caring
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only through messages on social networks. festival. The world of
technology
also
makes
people
easy to fall into a state of delusion. In the present era, it is still necessary to develop
technology
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the technology
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.
However
, the use of
technology
needs to be moderate and appropriate. The authorities need to strengthen the management and use of
technology
to serve healthy and community purposes. And each person
also
needs to balance between using
technology
and performing responsibilities to the community and family. Let
technology
become a relevant and effective tool for our
lives
.
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