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Recent advances in information technology have made communication between people a lot easier. However, these advances are negatively affecting human relationships as people spend less time in the company of others. Discuss the causes and suggest some solutions for this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Have you ever imagined what a day without a phone, laptop, or other electronics would be like? We frequently view
technology
 as an integral part of our
life
 and attribute these advances to
humans
.
However
, there is an opinion that every day,
people
 change
technology
, but
technology
also
 changes
people
's
life
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 🡪 daily,
people
 alter
technology
, but
technology
likewise
 transforms the lives of individuals
..
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 Is
technology
 rapidly influencing and shaping not only individual
behavior
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behaviour
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 and habits
,
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 but
also
 those of communities and generations? The term
technology
 is derived from
the
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Greek and refers to the tools, skills, and techniques used by
humans
 in their daily lives. Today,
technology
 is a system of techniques, instruments, and capacities for resolving issues or generating products (physical and intangible).
Humans
 are simultaneously advancing
technology
 and becoming increasingly dependent on it. When
humans
 intentionally replace a key portion (basic, core) or the entire
technology
 in use with
a
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more advanced
technology
, technological progress and transformation are unavoidable laws.
Technology
 is prevalent in every aspect of our
life
 and has indisputable advantages. Our lifestyles are getting better and better, saving work, etc.
However
, there are
also
 negative repercussions associated with increased technological dependence.
This
 results in laziness and inactivity; relationships
also
 become cold and lifeless when the majority chooses to maintain meetings, chit-chat, and concern solely through messaging on social networks. Festival.
Additionally
, the world of
technology
 renders
people
 susceptible to deception. Developing
the
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technology
 is still necessary
in
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 the present day.
However
, technological usage should be reasonable moderated and acceptable. The government must improve the administration and application of
technology
 for health and community reasons.
Moreover
, each individual must balance the use of
technology
 with their community and familial obligations. Let
technology
 become a useful and efficient component of our
life
.
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