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Information technology enables many People to do thier work. Outside their workplace . Do benifits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 technology era, gadgets like
mobile
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mobiles
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 and
laptop
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laptops
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 make peoples’ life easy and by
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this
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 they can
work
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 from home. Whilst, acknowledging that there are some drawbacks,
this
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 essay will argue that the advantages of mobility outweigh the disadvantages. On one hand, there are several pros of
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work
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 away from
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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.
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,
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situation like war, pandemics and illness never stop
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work
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the work
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 of
company
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the company
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.
Company
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 just needs to provide gadgets and WIFI connections. As an example, in
covid-19
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the covid-19
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 pandemic
government
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governments
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 of
majority
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the majority
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 of countries had to put
lockdown
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a lockdown
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in
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 their nations. In
this
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situations
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, IT companies like Google, TCS and others came
with
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 ideas of mobility
work
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 which gave benefits to companies' and nations' economies.
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, the trend of mobility works
help
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 new startups as they do not need to rent a place for their offices. They can give
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the task
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task
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 to their employees which can be finished from wherever their workers want.
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, there is one bad point of
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 trend
is
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physical
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a physical
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 disability. Individuals who need to
work
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 on a computer very often wear glasses. They have a common syndrome of dry eyes.
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, most of them have back pain because they need to sit
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in front
infront
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in front
 of
computer
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the computer
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 continuously for seven to eight hours. As per a recent survey
of
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Times
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 of India, almost 80% of employees who
work
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 from home get some common issues like their eyes
became
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 weak, lack of Vitamin D in their bodies and etc. In conclusion, using gadgets while working makes
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life
lifes
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life
 easier, because people can
work
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 from any part of
world
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the world
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 which is beneficial for
company
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the company
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 as well as their workers. So, these benefits
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definitely
definietly
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definitely
 outweigh the drawbacks of problems with health.

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