Information technology enables many People to do thier work. Outside their workplace . Do benifits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

In
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technology era, gadgets like
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and
laptop
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make peoples’ life easy and by
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they can
work
from home. Whilst, acknowledging that there are some drawbacks,
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essay will argue that the advantages of mobility outweigh the disadvantages. On one hand, there are several pros of
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away from
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workplaces
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.
First
,
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situation like war, pandemics and illness never stop
work
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of
company
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the company
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.
Company
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just needs to provide gadgets and WIFI connections. As an example, in
covid-19
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the covid-19
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pandemic
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governments
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of
majority
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the majority
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of countries had to put
lockdown
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in
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their nations. In
this
situations
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, IT companies like Google, TCS and others came
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ideas of mobility
work
which gave benefits to companies' and nations' economies.
Secondly
, the trend of mobility works
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new startups as they do not need to rent a place for their offices. They can give
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to their employees which can be finished from wherever their workers want.
On the other hand
, there is one bad point of
this
trend
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physical
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disability. Individuals who need to
work
on a computer very often wear glasses. They have a common syndrome of dry eyes.
Also
, most of them have back pain because they need to sit
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in front
infront
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in front
of
computer
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continuously for seven to eight hours. As per a recent survey
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Times
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of India, almost 80% of employees who
work
from home get some common issues like their eyes
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weak, lack of Vitamin D in their bodies and etc. In conclusion, using gadgets while working makes
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life
lifes
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life
easier, because people can
work
from any part of
world
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which is beneficial for
company
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the company
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as well as their workers. So, these benefits
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definitely
definietly
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definitely
outweigh the drawbacks of problems with health.
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