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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Reported 2017, Academic Test)

A good environment is admirable for everybody. Nowadays, the environment is getting polluted
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 various reasons. Some communities believe that to
decline
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address
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 the global environmental
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problems,
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 there should be a surge in the
cost
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 of
fuels
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. I disagree with
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 matter because there will be a huge impact on society when the
cost
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 of
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fuels
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fuel
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 is raised. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss
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 matter with relevant examples. On the one side,
Environment
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the Environment
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 is getting disturbed
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 various human activities. It is the responsibility of humans to
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nurture
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nature. Some human
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activities,
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are
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such as
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 deforestation, plastic usage, etc are leading to global warming.
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,
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nowadays
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,
people
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 are using vehicles which run on
fuels
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 like petrol and diesel.
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 these ,
vehicles
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vehicle
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 air pollution is occurring
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,
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which disturbs Nature. Nowadays,
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 machine
like
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, like
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 transportation vehicles, Industrial equipment,
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etc,
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 is using
fuels
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 to produce the products.
Due to
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this
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these
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 global
problems
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problems,
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are
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they have
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 surged. Some
people
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 think that
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the solution
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 to
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 problem is to raise the costs of
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fuels
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fuel
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. But
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 will lead to the destruction of the development of
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apply
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nation.
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, recently, some developing countries increased the costs of
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fuels
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fuel
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but
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, but
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 after
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a few
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days
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days,
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 there
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 a huge impact on the economy of
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those
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 countries.
People
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also
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 face many problems when there is a rise in the
cost
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 of
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fuels
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fuel
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 because
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 will lead to an increase in the
cost
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 of products. So, Normal middle-class
people
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 cannot afford to pay for the basic things to live.
To sum up
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,
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apply
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view
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, there
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 will be a great impact on society when there is a surge in the costs of
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. It
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 impacts the economy of the country
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, which
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 will increase the price of fuel.
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, I disagree with the given statement.

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task response
State a clear view in the intro and make a plan sentence so the reader knows what you will say.
task response
Add more detail to each point and link them to the question with simple examples.
coherence
Arrange your paragraph in a clear order: intro, two or three body paragraphs, then a clear conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected.
language accuracy
Check spelling and grammar; use simple, correct sentences.
structure
In the conclusion restate your view and give a short reason.
content
You state your view clearly in the intro.
coherence
You show a link between fuel use and pollution.
structure
The essay ends with a decision.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • curb
  • disproportionately
  • alternative energy sources
  • economic strain
  • sustainable projects
  • illegal activities
  • smuggling
  • black market
  • comprehensive policies
  • public awareness
  • conservation
  • unilateral measures
  • international cooperation
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