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Classroom attendance at universities should be optional. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#classroom #attendance #universities #support
Nowadays, there are a plethora of ways to attain knowledge.
However
, attending the lectures in varsity like the traditional ways must be flexible without putting any pressure on the
students
. In my perspective, I strongly condemn the above statement and firmly believe that the presence of children ought to be mandatory for their personal and professional
developments
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. To commence with, while attending
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college the
students
 comprehend
knowledge
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 and have a great learning experience. If a learner had participated in the
on-going
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 lectures regularly, he would get
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his field of study.
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, the
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post-graduate
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post graduate
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students
 who are regular in their classes tend to
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receive
recieve
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receive
 higher salary packages than the pupils with low
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appearance
appearace
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appearance
 in classes. Who would provide the letter of recommendation if the scholar has never attended the institute on a regular basis?
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, the personal growth of the student is attained only when they attend their educational institution punctually. To broaden the horizons of knowledge and
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the
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overall growth, one needs to monotonously be present in their
study-rooms
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.
Moreover
, while going to the educational
establishments
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 individuals are exposed to different ethnic groups of classmates and it would make them more curious and
understanable
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understandable
 of their culture and traditions.
For example
, when I graduated from my college I met
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distinctive language
students
 which made my university days memorable. In conclusion, I believe that even though education can be
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received
recieved
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received
 from any platform but to have
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exposure and a bright career one is obliged to attend university on daily basis.
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