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It is argued that the rich should pay higher taxes to be spent on Medicare programs. What is your opinion?

#taxes #medicare #programs
As per today's economy in our
country
, it is stated that the rich
people
 are paying a wholesome of money as tax to the
government
. A section of society argues that the
people
 with more income should pay higher taxes so that the money can be leveraged on the medicare programs . I will
discussing
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 it widely in the below paragraphs.
To begin
 with, in a developing
country
 like India where there is class inequality among
people
, the affluent families are generating more income from their business and are becoming richer day by day, while if we look at the poverty in our
country
, many
people
doesn't
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 even have proper food and shelter and the most important thing many
people
 in our
country
 can't afford for a proper medical treatment for some serious health conditions as well.
For example
, the latest health report stated that about 40% of the population in our
country
 died every year due to a lack of proper medical treatment.
In addition
 to
this
, nowadays medical treatment has become very costlier because of which many poor
people
 can't afford it. Even the children are
malnutritoned
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malnutrition
 due to a lack of nutritious supplements. Even though
Government
 is providing some health treatments for free but many
people
 are not receiving them. So it will be beneficial and good for society if the
government
 increase the tax percentage from rich
people
 and should be spent it on medical programs. With
this
 many poor
people
 can get proper medical facilities. In conclusion, after discussing the points on why rich
people
 should pay higher taxes , I strongly believe that
this
 is one of the best ways for the
government
 to generate more money which helps our economy and
also
 the
people
 from
lower
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 section will be beneficial and they will receive good healthcare benefits.
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