Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Nowadays , many diseases are increasing rapidly in some countries especially, which is financially above rather than others and one of the most spreads is obesity so

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acid discuss the reason and solution for

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statement.

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of all , in the modern era , we can see new

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items every day, which some of is not healthy but

people

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would try due to launched items ,

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, whenever prestigious

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brands declare product

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their run behind them as never see again.

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they do not know the negative side of it , at

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, they invite some new diseases

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their body.

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, the new generation is addicted to street

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however

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, they know about the side effect but they need to eat it even if it is harmful to the stomach

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as narcotic substances , involves in the

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due to

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get drunk for it ,

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, it impacts on their mind so that they cannot focus on their own life's goals.

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disease is spreading quickly in rich countries due to laziness

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they cannot do any kind of

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so they have become a victim of

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, we should decrease the rate of it so that we should do the program , Which gives a knowledge about

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that what should we eat? And what should we not?

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, many countries opened

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departments, which

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as a camera and keep their eye on the restaurant so that

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will get good quality products.

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, we should try to encourage the family that must do their

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from their self ,

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, they would gain their fat and becoming healthier life there. In conclusion ,

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should

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on their own hands so that they cannot go to any particular exercise classes and

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they must avoid unhealthy

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, they eat homemade products , which give good quality , vitamins and other materials that we want.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Your opinion

Foreign language should be part of curriculum of the school. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools should invest more money in technology, such as more computers, while others think more money should be spent on teachers. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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