Some people say that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, despite the increasing number of companies producers have to make optimal use of advertising in order to be more successful in the highly competitive market. Some people believe that advertisement plays a key role so as to persuade customers to buy goods.

However

, there are some opposite arguments that claim

adds

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have

loss

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their

matters

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and can not able to attract

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attention

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attentions

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attention

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as much as before.

Although

from my point of view advertising is a powerful tool to persuade a person

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purchases

perchases

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things even while they do not

need

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themneed

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, both

side

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of these arguments will be discussed. Fusty, people who are

favour

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of advertising believe that

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apply

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owning

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owing

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high_ tech devices and intelligent

soft_wares

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software

lots of acceptable advertisements are produced which are powerfully persuasive. As evidence of that, colourful clips from some

well_known

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well-known

brands of

cloths

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can affect teenagers to buy things

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for

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them.

Furthermore

, innovative and creative manufacturers use

make

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some funny and exciting short films which are

frequantly

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frequently

shown by the media at

especefic

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specific

time that are more likely to be successful.

Thus

, these effective

move

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are accepted by more and more individuals.

On the other hand

, opponents claim that because of

busy

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lifestyle

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inhabitants do not have adequate time to spend

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apply

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watching

adds

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ads

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Also

, they find

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Fully explain your ideas

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

262 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
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saturated
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distracting
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Some people say that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in studies. what are the causes and its solution?