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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
 especially children and teenagers can get sick easily because of many a range of factors. Having many opinions on
this
 problem, some
people
 say that if want to improve their
health
, they should usually go to sports facilities.
Besides
 that, some
people
 think have more than one reason was affected human
health
.
First
 of all, more and more sports facilities were built. It is accidental made to encourage everyone to get in the habit of
exercise
 and help
people
 avoid illnesses.
However
, in the reality, they must not be done
exercise
 regularly.
However
, we never force
people
 to
exercise
 every day
,
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 and is not the best way to improve public
health
.
Instead
of
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, the government should provide resident insurance that helps
people
 not need to pay fees. They can be cured when they have no money to pay fees. Plus, gas from motorbikes and cars make air pollution.
Therefore
 the respiratory system was affected, and life expectancy will be decreased. Now, all countries are trying to decrease environmental pollution, public
health
 can be ensured. And having many ways to improve human
health
such
 as having healthy eating habits, eating food that has vitamins, and taking part in
health
 protection programs will prepare them for
potentially
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 fatal
illness
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. In short, our
health
 will be adversely affected by our habits, and sports facilities have not too big of an impact on their life. So, the government should have advised
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resident
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 to take care of themself and
exercise
 regularly to improve their
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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