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Now a days celebrities earn more than politicians what are the reasons for this it is a positive or the negative development

#celebrities #politicians #development
Well ,some people believe that
celebrities
 earn more capital than politicians .
thus
,
this
 essay is an attempt to discuss the reasons behind
this
 fact in the subsequent paragraph prior to the meaningful conclusion. I believe it is a positive development.
To begin
 with ,there are numerous reasons the
first
 and foremost, as we live in the technical Era the
all ages
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 group people are using social media platform and the
celebrities
 post their songs and music on these social websites .
moreover
, the Strata of the society follow the
celebrities
 not only on the Internet even in the
reality
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 life the most famous Popstar
such
 as toa tein and
hoang
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 ding. they
were not earn
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did not earn
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 handsome salaries only from their talents even
they
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though they
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 do
advertisement
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advertisements
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also
.
However
, the politicians have their fixing hours to do their respectful jobs and the salaries was fixed as per government rules and regulations but the
celebrities
 earn higher capital
then
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 advocates .afterwards ,politicians do not have their business but
as a
result
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celebrities
 have
more
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a more
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 and more huge business
such
 as restaurant ,beauty shop, etc . To conclude,
i
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 wholeheartedly, I believe that more income
earn
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by
celebrities
then
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than
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 the politician and it is a positive trend because of the advantages of that
such
 as
celebraties
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celebrities
 trend to do charities more and more.
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