Some people believe that students in school learn better when they studying in group whereas others believe students learn better when they study their own. Discuss both views and give opinion.

Society claims that learning together can bring more benefits to
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others say that learning alone is preferable. I think that if someone studies with another person, it will help
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because it can bring mutual benefit by having them take turns in explaining and pushing their
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as there will be more competitiveness.
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essay will discuss both views and my opinion. On the one hand, learning with two or more students brings two positive impacts on learning.
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as some research shows that humans can understand better when they explain something to other humans, studying in a group
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them
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turns to teach each other.
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, they can
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exchange information that may not be received for the first time by the other students.
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unconsciously,
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will compare themselves with others, so
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will be under pressure to achieve better. Everyone can check how he performs compared to the average
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by checking their rank
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all.
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, when a boy gets the tenth rank among fifteen
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, he will try to study better so he can get a higher rank because of pressure from peers, parents, or himself.
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, studying alone has special advantages that cannot be achieved by studying together.
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, because the teacher only focuses on one student, the teacher can make free adjustments
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his progress. So, smarter children do not need to wait for others who learn
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than
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Secondly
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, comparing with
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also may
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someone feel insecure, so studying alone avoids any comparison to happen.
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, everyone has different strengths and weaknesses, so it is not fair if people use the same standards to measure. The majority of schools,
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, have an examination that asks for theories in textbooks, and,
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, a child who is creative will perform worse than another who can
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better.
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, studying by one person or two
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more people
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its own advantages. I prefer studying in the community
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we can mutually benefit
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other and be more competitive in our studies.

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structure
Plan your answer first. In the intro, say your view and what you will talk about. Put ideas in a clear order.
grammar
Use simple words and correct word form. Some sentences are odd. Check grammar and word choice.
content
Give one clear example for each point. Right now some ideas are general. A real point helps.
content
You show both sides and give your own view.
language
You use 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show contrast.
structure
There is a clear plan in your writing with an intro, body and conclusion.
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