It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

In today’s society, the idea of taking big
risks
for big
rewards
is being ubiquitously advocated on various social platforms,
this
mentality has been planted into the mind of many people, especially
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youths with a burning desire for prosperity, and social standing. Taking
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has become a norm to differentiate between a courageous and non-motivated person,
hence
there is a belief that it is crucial for anyone to take
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, or step out of their comfort zone, in both their work, as well as their personal
life
. I personally believe that taking
risks
carries more disadvantages than its own merits for the following reasons.
Firstly
, the charming aspect of taking
risks
usually lies in the
rewards
that come
as a result
. Most people are willing to take big
risks
for the attractive
rewards
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the end, but they tend to intentionally ignore the hardship it might take to get to the end of the process. Let’s consider an example when a student wants to quit college to pursue an entrepreneurship path. Entrepreneurship is one of the most commonly romanticized career paths on many social platforms, where they only show readers the wealthy
life
of a business owner with multiple luxury cars, designer clothing and magnificent mansions. But rarely do they show the brutal 16-hour work day, constant stress, or missing out
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occasions behind the prosperous lifestyle of these self-made entrepreneurs, which
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the reality of taking
risks
. Another point to take into consideration,
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become successful by taking
risks
is
also
heavily dependent on the matter of luck. Though hard work, discipline and intelligence play vital roles in the promising outcome of taking
risks
, one cannot avoid the uncertainty of
life
, which can lead the whole process to collapse. An example can be taken from a close relative of mine, whose bakery had been doing well before the Covid-19 incident.
This
relative of mine has always been known for her resilience in stressful periods, combining with her impeccable sense
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business, her dream bakery was at its peak performance in 2019 when an unexpected pandemic swept through. The devastating event caused the business to break down, and
this
relative of mine has been suffering
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mental illness ever since.
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example shows the uncertain reality of
life
can be an obstacle for any
risk
takers. To sum up, even though success in taking big
risks
will definitely result in promising
rewards
, it
also
comes with many concerns.
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itself is a challenging task, which is often ignored because of the attractive results.
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can
also
take a toll on the well-being of anyone, and dramatically alter the personal
life
of a person.
Therefore
, a person should only step out of their comfort zone if they have
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strong resilience to stress, and the capability to cope with any unexpected outcome of the process.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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