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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, the economy is the most important factor in improving the people all around the world.
However
, some nations believe in
this
 idea, on the other ,some society thinks educational improvement is more effective than economic advance. In my opinion, economic momentum covers education evolution.
Therefore
, the economy is
a
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 most important factor
for
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 growing the
governments
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. First of all, some nations believe economic growth is significant for enhancing the Ministry.
For instance
, if an authority has
economical
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 power, it will build schools and factories.
Then
, the government will have a strong educational system and quality products.
Besides
, when the government produces its own products, it will export to all other countries.
Thus
, an economic breakthrough most important goal.
On the other hand
, some communities think education is the most effective factor in growing authority. As an example of
this
, when the population take a professional education , they will
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well
organize
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 for producing something.
As a result
, economic growth is top of the list for other processes. If we
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 not provide recession headway, all other things will not improve.
Thus
, I believe
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success is most powerful and necessary for all countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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