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Some people prefer renting than buying a home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a house?

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In recent times, most
people
 decide to rent houses
instead
 of
purchase
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 residence, the main advantage of
this
 trend is that it would help to positively the economy and the main drawback is that
people
 cannot transform living place, in
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand,
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new generation considered renting
home
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a home
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 because it has common benefits,
contribute
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and contribute
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 to us, the main benefit is that the community can avoid tax payment because it would help to enhance
people
's economy if buy
a
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 own
home
people
 must pay house and land tax
nevertheless
 renting a house not pressuring the community economy,
therefore
,
people
 only have to pay on electricity gas and water bills to rented
home
's
For instance
, in the developed world that a prominent number of population live in
rented
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home
's
furthermore
, another merit is that
people
 could change places anytime if they need.
On the other hand
, the main disadvantage of
this
 phenomenon is that
people
 could not have the right to modify the place that way, it would affect
people
's day-to-day life
moreover
, another negative aspect is that
people
 must pay on rent the due date
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