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In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Many people argue that are concerned about the number of the young generation who are overweight. There
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 a number of reasons behind the phenomenon and several solutions should be adopted by the government and individuals to improve the situation. There are two main reasons associated with
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 tendency,
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 poor diet,
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 is mainly due to being overweight.
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 lack of exercise. Fortunately, several measures could be taken to alleviate
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 problem. The
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 solution would be to educate children about healthy food. They learn to use which kind of food,
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 they know how to prepare simple healthy meals. Another solution is to encourage youngth people to exercise according to some research They spend more time playing sports.
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, football, badminton, running, jogging,… are very good for health. In conclusion, It is clear that various reasons for overweight in children and steps need to be taken by the government and individuals to tackle
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 problem. It can be predicted that there are many children who are healthy life.
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