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The length of working week does not reflect mordern lifestyle needs. It should be substantially reduced to give people more leisure time and time with their families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In recent years, unfortunately, the
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-life balance is totally disproportionate;
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 too much and spend little
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 with their families.
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, is gaining ground in the idea to reduce the
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 of working
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 in order to give
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 more spare
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 to stay with their beloveds. I am a strong advocate of
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 solution, and in
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 essay, I will explain its benefits. It is not important how much you
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, but how well you
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. Indeed, companies do not need
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 who
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 hours every day for 5 or 6
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 a week, if the job is carried out poorly. It is better,
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, to reduce the
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 of working
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 in order to increase productivity. The Netherlands,
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, has reduced
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 from 5 to 4 per week. The outcome has been surprisingly better than the forecasts:
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 have worked extremely better during these four
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, and have had enough free
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 for their families.
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, modern society is too frenetic. The rhythms of everyday life have reached levels which are not healthy for anyone. In fact, new disorders are spreading around,
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 as amnesia, insomnia, anxiety, and stress.
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, my mother, who is a doctor, is experiencing an impressive
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 of
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 with
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 kind of disorder, who are devastated by the modern rhythms of society. To solve
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 issue, there should be a balance between
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 and leisure
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, in which
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 can take care of themselves. In conclusion,
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 is fundamental for a person's financial freedom.
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, working too much is causing huge problems, both relational and healthy-related.
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, hopefully in the future, more governments will follow the Netherlands, reducing the
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 of working
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 by enforcing new laws.
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