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The length of working week does not reflect mordern lifestyle needs. It should be substantially reduced to give people more leisure time and time with their families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In recent years, unfortunately, the
work
-life balance is totally disproportionate;
people
work
 too much and spend little
time
 with their families.
Therefore
, is gaining ground in the idea to reduce the
number
 of working
days
 in order to give
people
 more spare
time
 to stay with their beloveds. I am a strong advocate of
this
 solution, and in
this
 essay, I will explain its benefits. It is not important how much you
work
, but how well you
work
. Indeed, companies do not need
people
 who
work
 hours every day for 5 or 6
days
 a week, if the job is carried out poorly. It is better,
instead
, to reduce the
number
 of working
days
 in order to increase productivity. The Netherlands,
for instance
, has reduced
this
number
 from 5 to 4 per week. The outcome has been surprisingly better than the forecasts:
people
 have worked extremely better during these four
days
, and have had enough free
time
 for their families.
Moreover
, modern society is too frenetic. The rhythms of everyday life have reached levels which are not healthy for anyone. In fact, new disorders are spreading around,
such
 as amnesia, insomnia, anxiety, and stress.
For example
, my mother, who is a doctor, is experiencing an impressive
number
 of
people
 with
this
 kind of disorder, who are devastated by the modern rhythms of society. To solve
this
 issue, there should be a balance between
work
 and leisure
time
, in which
people
 can take care of themselves. In conclusion,
work
 is fundamental for a person's financial freedom.
However
, working too much is causing huge problems, both relational and healthy-related.
Therefore
, hopefully in the future, more governments will follow the Netherlands, reducing the
number
 of working
days
 by enforcing new laws.
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