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Some school children have less natural ability to learn other languages. Therefore, it is not right to force these school children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is indeed that every child has a different ability to learn new things ,especially a
language
 as some can catch it easily whereas others feel hard to learn.
Hence
, it is suggested not to force the
children
 to learn any particular
language
 and should allow them to learn what they are liking. I agree with
this
 statement and will highlight my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.
Children
 nowadays are under huge pressure from teachers and
parents
 to excel in the new
language
 as
parents
 want to make their
children
 all-rounders due to increased competition in every field. But
this
 approach is not advisable due to various reasons.
Firstly
, the tender minds of
children
 can be overburdened by the additional pressure of learning a new
language
 as they already have other subjects in their curriculum.
Therefore
, the time they usually devote to playing and leisure activities will be devoted to additional
language
 and their lifestyle will become sedentary and boring. In
this
 way, they become victims of depression which impacts their physical and mental growth.
Secondly
, the performance of students in other areas where they are excellent is affected by the burden of additional subjects and their performance in other academics is declined which ultimately affects the morale of school
children
.
Moreover
,
children
 feel a lack of independence as decisions are imposed on them by
parents
 as their consent is never asked,which results in differences in the parent-child relationships. So, the
parents
 should not pressurise them to learn something without knowing the choice of their
children
. In conclusion, learning a foreign
language
 must be a decision of a student and should not be imposed by
parents
 or teachers as it can affect feelings of tender minds and can put a burden on them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural ability
  • foreign language
  • aptitude
  • cognitive benefits
  • cultural understanding
  • individualized learning
  • education systems
  • one-size-fits-all curriculum
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • negative attitudes
  • equal opportunities
  • skill development
  • strengths and weaknesses
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