Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed. Films need to be seen in a Cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Movies are considered an entertainment feature for any age group. Many people prefer to watch movies using smartphones or iPads whilst some prefer to visit the movies as it is more entertaining. In
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context, admittedly elaborate the view of using both statements. Many individuals prefer phones and other equipment as it has become a necessity and these devices have become more advanced at the same time in the twenty-
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century. There are pros and cons to utilizing smart devices.
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, to discuss the benefits of the usage of mobile phones or tablets, it is portable and convenient for the person to watch
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or series while they are on the go. Technology has become more advance and there are applications which enable the user to download their favourite show. To maintain the app they require to pay a monthly subscription fee with no advertisements or the ability to pause when required, evidence that appears to be Netflix.
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, the downside of watching on a small cover leads to health issues,
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as straining the eye, and affecting the posture may lead to health issues.
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, the advantage of watching
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at the theatre, in my point of view there are individuals who prefer watching cinema on a bigger cover, with a good quality sound system.
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have the facility of purchasing popcorn and other snacks to consume during their show.
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, the disadvantage of no privacy where the room gets compact with people surrounded and disturbance. In my opinion,
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on the big curtain than on the small cover regardless of the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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