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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is advisable that you follow a
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country's
coutry’s
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country’s
culture
 when you move to a foreign
country
. In my opinion, I strongly believe that obeying foreign
customs
 and
traditions
 in a
country
 is absolutely needed. There are a handful of reasons why you should obey a
country
’s
customs
 and
traditions
.
Firstly
, when following a foreign land’s
culture
, you will be seen as respectful because that means you have done
researches
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research
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 and
learn
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learned
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 about the
country
 before living in it,
that
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and that
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 you are actually interested in it.
Secondly
,
emerge
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emerging
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 into a
country
’s cultural
act
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activities
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 will give you knowledge.
For instance
, you don’t fully understand what
Tet
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the Tet
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 holiday is until you go to Vietnam or other Asian countries to experience it.
Finally
, following a land’s
customs
 and
traditions
 helps you fit in with the locals. When you follow a
culture
, the locals think that you respect their
country
, and will gradually accept you, so that you won’t feel lonely when staying
at
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in
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 a foreign place.
On the other hand
, not following a custom or tradition is not appropriate for a number of reasons.
This
 makes you seem like a disrespectful person, that you dislike these actions and you refuse to participate in it as it seems like you move to a
country
 despite knowing nothing about it.
In addition
, the local people will find it hard to accept you, because you aren’t showing any respect from their perspective.
Furthermore
, there is no point in living in a new
country
 if you don’t plan to learn anything new. The point of
traveling
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travelling
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 and staying somewhere new is to know more about the world, yet you neglect the
country
’s
culture
, which is the whole core of the knowledge.
This
 is bound to cause you great difficulty if you want to study about the
country
. If you don’t want to learn about its
culture
,
then
 basically you are not learning anything at all. In conclusion, when living in a new
country
, you should follow its
customs
 and
traditions
 to learn more about its
culture
.
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