People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that
people
who dwell in a new
country
should follow the
customs
and
traditions
in
this
country
. I completely with
this
opinion. There are
some
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several reasons why
people
should follow the
customs
and
traditions
when migrating to a new
country
.
Firstly
, when
people
follow it, they can understand and explore the historical origins
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were
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passed down by their forefathers, cultural beauty,
unique
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and unique
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customs
from which to understand more deeply about the
people
here .
Secondly
, understand the
people
here you will be able to make new friends, make new relationships,
help
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and help
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you
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become integrated into society.
Finally
,
by
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following and understanding the
customs
and
traditions
of the
country
can help them to actively participate in community activities.
In
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many festivals,
people
can participate freely and feel as harmonious as
their
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in their
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own
country
. Attending festivals helps them accumulate a lot of cultural knowledge to enrich their knowledge.
On the other hand
, immigrants will meet a lot of difficulties when not following the
customs
and
traditions
in a new
country
. In doing business, it is always necessary for foreign companies to spend some time researching and learning about the local nature and work to be done before starting
business
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a business
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in any other
country
. If you don't follow the
customs
and
traditions
, it will be difficult for you to
business
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.
Furthermore
, if immigrants didn’t behave in accordance with the local norms, they wouldn’t receive
respects
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from local
people
. They do not follow the laws of the
country
,
against
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the law and engage in anti-traditional
behavior
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.
For example
, if you immigrate to the UK and continue to do the same things as in
own
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country
such
as playing loud music in the house, disturbing the families, the British will call the police and possibly get into a fight with him . In conclusion,
customs
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the customs
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and
traditions
of a
country
that
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apply
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help immigrants adapt to life , improve
many
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new knowledge and
making
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new relationships.
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