Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same way as adults by authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (2015.04.25)

Criminal problems of youngsters are important concerns of

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since the young generations are the future and hope of the nations. Some people think that juvenile delinquents should be treated in the same way as

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by authorities; I disagree with it. Admittedly,

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should give punishments to young offenders. One reason is that they cause as much pain and suffering to their victims as adult offenders,

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, they should be punished for breaking the law and allowing them to reflect

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committing a crime in the prison.

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, their illegal activities would pose a threat to

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as theft, robbing and murder. So, sending them to prison can protect the public from them, which would help to ensure social stability and security.

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, reforming young

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can reduce the re-offending rate since they can develop useful skills during rehabilitation and prepare for employment in the future.

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, young

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can find jobs and have stable sources of income after having vocational training courses held by governments.

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, it is not appropriate to treat young law-breakers in the same way as

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by governments.

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, the youth are not mature to understand the consequences of their actions, which means that

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illegal action of them cannot fully constitute the requirements of crime

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, it is easier for minor

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to go astray by copying what they see and heard from adult prisoners since they would make friends with them and become more violent and dangerous.

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would not only increase their possibility of re-offending but

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pose threat to

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, it is a more proper way if community services can be added

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in adolescence since it can help them to develop a sense of responsibility and become law-abiding citizens. In conclusion,

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juvenile delinquents should be given punishments since they pose a threat to

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and cause much pain and suffering to their victims, I hold

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view that they should not

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since they are immature and easily influenced by adult offenders.